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T from Bid
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Hello, I'm new here.

I won't bore anyone with the "woe is me" of me being a bit clumsy or a little eccentric, just gonna copy and paste a poem or two because that's a hobby of mine. If others have poems or want to dunk on my lame or corny words, feel free, it's funny.
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Banana Boat (Funny name, I don't have a proper title)

We ate a banana every lunch on the bench,
By a lake of nirvana with flowery stench,
with youth and with love, our souls where as one,
Not a time would I shove, but a time now I none,
For the time, it was not meant to be.

Your mutinous heart, your relationship sails,
But given the wrong winds, your captaining fails,
Without the lighthouse of wisdom and grace,
Your love, it shipwrecks in a terrible place.

Your corset of charms did once warm me internal,
With the passionate arms of summer eternal,
But your mutinous heart cleft us in twain,
When I see that bench, it reminds me of pain,
For the time, it was not meant to be.

Your mutinous heart, your relationship sails,
But given the wrong winds, your captaining fails,
Without the lighthouse of wisdom and grace,
Your love, it shipwrecks in a terrible place.

You left in the evening, with no word to be said,
My thoughts went and whispered, you were possibly dead,
Fear went to anger, your actions, I try,
You abandoned your post, your people and I,
For the time, it was not meant to be.
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Waiting for you

I spend my days, waiting for you to say “hello”,
Impatience is building, so what does my fate befall?
I’m procrastinating, will you even show?
Some say you don’t care; you play me like a ball,
But a faith untested is not a faith at all,

Some shadows point to rainbows,
Those roads, they lead to Rome,
I’ll message you tomorrow,
It’s time to head for home,

Doubting the stars, waiting for you to break my heart,
There is no rejection, there’s no end for us to call,
You’d be Picasso if tension was an art,
Bending in limbo, with pressure for me to haul,
But a faith untested is not a faith at all,

Few shadows point to rainbows,
Most roads, they lead to Rome,
Might message you tomorrow,
It’s time to head for home,

Waiting for you is like squeezing blood from a stone,
Do I annoy you, or do I lack the wherewithal?
The blood I have gathered seems to be my own,
Do you expect me to get on my knees and crawl?
Because I can’t hold onto faith in you at all.

No shadows point to rainbows,
No roads, don’t lead to Rome,
No message for tomorrow,
It’s time to be alone.
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Ruin to Rebirth

A heart of gold doth not guarantee a mind of logic,
The road to ruin is paved with just intentions,
It would appear that this blessed world has turned psychotic,
And what was once right ceases to get mentions

Values once held proud atop our sacred Christian alter,
Were permitted to perish, corrupt and falter,
Because sin is fashionable in high heels and red lip stick,
Fallen minds devour sinister rhetoric

Thy tools of procreation art discarded as proof of purposes,
Man’s world is a cult of willful ignorance,
Deluded personas thrust upon us like circuses,
Now gestated into resentful pestilence

Yet one godless soul through tragedy hath been enlightened,
To henceforth steel a mind before frightened,
A life inspired by holy sincerity shalt commence,
Hereon liberated from bonds of vehemence!
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4 faces, 2 men

“Hello there, you are looking really great”,
Hey, I see ye’ve agglomerated weight,
“You should be happy in your skin no matter what you look like”,
Don some boots, thou hefty eater of cake, exercise, run, hike

“Thank you, good sir, I heard you left your work”,
Jobless ragged urchin, wipe off your smirk, 10
“A gambit like that is hard to pull off, but it’s a fresh start!”,
You jilted your career over a pious change of heart!

“My enlightenment, you’ve heard about it?”,
What dost thou worship, thou rotund halfwit,
“It was a shock to discover I was immoral and wrong”,
It is a plague upon my nostrils that thou have come along!

“I have never been religious at all”,
My brain hath never been so small,
“What encouraged you to convert if you don’t mind me asking”,
After decades of atheism, to whom art thou masking?

“I would rather that story is private”,
To my mind, thou art a portly pirate,
“But I have noticed the rhyming demon inside of my head”,
Thou canst still harken unto me, return to evil, to dread!

This poem was fun to write, a judgy conversation between 2 people, each with daemons judging in harsh, old English.
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That's all for now, I write other things also, not just poetry. feel free to post your own!
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Hey,

These are intoxicating, and relatable

I have been reading up on Shakespeare, and came across ‘close reading’ in terms of performing.

And I wonder if you had a suggestion; ways of breaking down text which is within the process you have gone through

I also wonder if you have ever written a play, or a story?? Would love to read it/them

Either way I’m interested in anything that relates to the written word, being understood, and performed.

“that which comes through A nervous system of dyspraxia will definitely relate”
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My creative process starts with writing anything that pops into mind, mostly on my phone notes section, mostly phrases. Then I sit down when I have nothing to do with a thesaurus to cheat.

I always stick to a rule for each poem, many of them I have a set number of lines with a mirroring rhyming structure from verse to verse.

I always number the amount of syllables in the line, this allows me to pattern the verses into a similar format, and if I get stuck with a limited number of syllables, I either get creative with skipping words, going oldschool with Shakespearian English, or I add a syllable to every one of the lines in the mirrored verses.

Happy to hear a reply, and yes, I write scripts sometimes. ;)
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This is an example of how I structure my poetry:

Drummer

£She wears a dress, her shoes expensive, 8
£Her nerves a mess, her mind is straight pensive, 10
#She has little practice in those high heels, 10
$To this date, it was just first dates, 8
$Staying late, with guys she now hates, 8
Tonight, is the night, to meet Mister Right, 10
#She’s there too early, hands shaking like eels. 10

£He wears a coat, hiding his knees, 8
£Turns up with boat, like romantic cheese, 10
#He welcomes his dame with his bunioned hand, 10
$Confidence, tall as monuments, 8
$Competence, he brought condiments, 8
Tonight, is the night, to dine with Miss Right, 10
#A drummer he says, he’s plays for the band. 10

£Her heart is jazz, her feet are backwards, 8
£Though she’s a spaz, and her voice is awkward, 10
#She has the eye of the man with the drums. 10
$To his BANG, her toes are tapping, 8
$To his POW, she’s there a’clapping, 8
When it is quiet, she’s on a diet, 10
#A little diet of whistles and hums. 10

End

So, I numbered the syllables into an 8,10,10,8,8,10,10 pattern, then I used symbols to remind me of the type of line to write.
The challenge I set myself was to write something semi-romantic with double rhyming in most of the lines.

It seems like a coincidence that the lady is dyspraxic... Or was it planned? :)
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Hi and welcome

It's weird with the workings in, but I still do quite like it - I'm not a good poetry critic

I think we often lean towards the creative and unusual. After all 'normal' is overrated and soon gets tedious!
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I didn't say I was good, lol. But I encourage others to write, it's fun.
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